It is said that
Michelangelo, when asked how he had sculpted his masterpiece, The David,
replied, “I looked at the stone and removed all that was not The
David.”
Not a bad description of
the novel revision process. From the mass of words you have created, you
will take away all that is not
your novel. You’ll chisel and add, touch up, and cut, but in the end what
you want is your story in its purest form.
And only you can decide
what form that will be.
Depending on the writer,
you’ll get different answers to what re-writing is, such
as:
Re-writing is
hell.
Re-writing is fun.
Re-writing is dull,
because all the delight was in the creation.
Re-writing is like
getting to take a final exam again, only open book and with your old
answer sheet for reference.
And so on. What all
writers do agree on (or at least 99 percent of them) is that rewriting is
essential to the production of a great novel.
Robert Heinlein had two
rules for writers:
1. You must
write.
2. You must finish what
you write.
Before you
can revise your novel you’ve got to have…your novel.
So write
it.
With a few revision
principles in mind. Very few, because the object of the first draft is to
get it done. Only then will you take a long pause to get it right.
I don’t recommend that
you do major revision during the writing of your first draft. The
temptation to stop and make major changes is constant, and it can drive
you bats. And most of the time these changes aren’t the best thing for the
story that’s trying to bubble up from your writer’s
mind.
You only truly get to
know your novel when you’ve finished it. So consider your first draft an
exploration into what’s really happening in your story. Some of your best
stuff will come into focus later, as you look back at what you’ve
written.
Still there are two
exceptions to this rule that I’ve found quite
helpful.
1. Revise Your Previous
Pages
Look at what you wrote
the day before (or during your last writing stint), and do a quick edit.
This practice puts you back into the flow of your story and gets you ready
to write the new material.
I like to print out a
hard copy of pages and mark them up. Of course, you can do all this on the
computer screen. I just find that the act of reading physical pages more
closely mimics what a reader will be doing, and I catch more things this
way.
Mostly I’m editing for
style. The way the sentences flow. I want to make sure what I wanted to
convey has actually happened on the page. If a major plot or character
problem emerges, or I get an idea for something to add, I just make a note
of it and get to my day’s writing quota.
Write as fast as you
comfortably can on your first draft.
2. Try the 20,000-Word
Step Back
Whether you're a NOP (No
Outline Person) or an OP (Outline Person), the 20,000-word step back can
be a tremendous step.
After 20,000 words you
stop, take a day off, then read what you have. By this time your story
engine should be running. You’ve done enough of the novel to know pretty
much what it’s about. You then take some time to make sure you like the
characters and the direction.
If you don’t, make some
changes now.
This is a good point to
make your lead characters richer by adding background (whether you include
this for the readers or not), behaviors, quirks, strengths, flaws, and
tags (speech, dress, etc.).
You can also make a
decision about the tone and feel of your novel. It may be wanting to take
on a different emphasis than what you had planned. A better novel may be
asking to be released.
The First Read-Through
Bobby Knight, one of
college basketball’s greatest (and most volatile) coaches, once said,
“Practice doesn’t make perfect. Perfect practice makes
perfect.”
Quite true. If you
practice the wrong things, you
are not going to be better player or team.
So the old saw Writing is rewriting! needs a
little tweak. Good writing is
re-writing with know-how.
That’s what this book is
for. To give you both the tools and the strategies for approaching every
aspect of revision.
And the first big moment
is when you have a completed manuscript.
This is a crucial time,
fraught with peril. Okay, perhaps peril is a bit much, but fraught is certainly applicable.
What you must avoid is any temptation to stop and do wholesale revisions
before you have read the entire
manuscript once.
Think of this process as
GoogleEarth. You want to get a complete overview of your “earth.” Your
novel. Your story as a whole. You can spin the earth a little here and
there to get a better view, but stay up top. You’ll tag a few places to
visit later, to zoom in on. That’ll be the nuts and bolts of
revision.
But to start, you need
the big picture. You want the feel of the story, to anticipate
what the readers will pick up. Here are the steps to
follow:
It’s essential to give
yourself a break from the first draft. At least two weeks. Three is
better, and if you can spare it go for a month (but if you’re like me that
seems like an eternity. And if you have a deadline you may not have that
luxury).
During this “cooling
phase,” try to forget about your book completely. Some writers use this
time for a weeklong refresher and don’t do any writing at all. Others,
myself included, want to be working on something all the
time.
If that’s you, work on
another project. Pour yourself in into it. If it’s another novel, get
cracking. If not, write an essay or a blog post or do writing exercises
(such as those you’ll find in The
3 a.m.
Epiphany).
Or journal.
Or write opening chapters
for novels you may never write. Just start with an intriguing opening line
and write without any pre-planning. Who knows? You may just get an idea
you’ll want to develop.
The main thing is to get
all of your concentration focused on writing that is not your first
draft.
Try to work up a
little excitement as you come to the first read-through. A good mental outlook
helps generate insights. Make it fun.
One thing I like to do is
create a cover for my manuscript. I do a simple design, and then I put a
critic’s blurb on it. Like this:
Try
Dying
By James Scott
Bell
"Bell just keeps getting
better.
Yes indeed, the suspense never rests!"
—New
York
Herald Tribune
The New York Herald Tribune, by the
way, is long dead. But it was alive during my favorite period for crime
fiction, the 1950s.
No one is going to see
this, so lay it on thick.
The fun is about to
begin.
If you’re having some
trepidation about the whole process of revision—which many writers do—you
might want to do up a little list of positives that you can refer to as
you go:
-
This rewrite is going
to make the book stronger, better
-
I have the tools that
will make the book better
-
Great Writing is
Re-writing with Know How, which is what I’ve
got
-
Re-writing with know-how is the mark of a pro, and I am a
pro
Add to the list as you
desire, but give yourself every possible motivation to dig and get to
work.
Get yourself a clean,
crisp copy of your manuscript, with that cover on top. Should you print it
out on one-sided pages? Double spaced? Courier
font?
All of these
questions are up to you. Double spacing and one-sided printing allows for notes,
but since I don’t advocate copious notes for the first read-through, this
isn’t a major concern for me.
I like to use Times font,
single-spaced, double sided, because I want to create the feeling of an
actual printed novel. I want to be like a reader, looking at it for the
first time.
I like to three-hole
punch my manuscript and put it in a binder I can fold completely
back.
Where do you like to read
a brand new book by your favorite author? I don’t read for pleasure in my
office. I have a nice soft chair by my living room window where I like to
settle in with a nice cup of Joe.
Whatever your ritual is,
replicated it with your manuscript.
The only difference is
you’ll have a red felt tip pen (or whatever you like to jot with) and note
pad.
Try to read the
manuscript through in a couple of sittings. Three or four at the most.
What you want to create
is the feeling of being a fresh reader, getting into this book for the
first time.
Don’t stop to make
changes at this point. You may jot a few things down, notes to yourself
and the like, but keep going to get the overall impression of the
book.
I do use some shorthand
markings the first time through.
-
A checkmark for
pages where I feel the story is dragging.
-
Parentheses around
incomprehensible sentences.
-
A circle in the margin
where I think material needs to be added.
-
A question mark for
material I think might need to be cut or changed, or that otherwise
doesn’t make sense.
Using Outside Readers
Some writers like to give
their drafts to trusted readers. People who know what they’re doing and
can offer an objective viewpoint. Readers like this are extremely
valuable. Show them their value by treating them to an opulent meal (or
something analogous) every time they help
you.
You might want to include
a simple response sheet along the following
lines:
-
What did you think of
the overall plot?
-
What did you
like/dislike about the main characters?
-
Were there places where
you got bored? Please explain.
-
Any suggestions for
improvement?
-
What did you like about
the book? (Take as much time as you want with this
section!)
After the first
read-through, begin to make notes. Answer the following
questions.
-
Does my story make
sense?
-
Is the plot compelling?
-
Does the story flow or
does it seem choppy?
-
Do my lead characters
“jump off the page”?
-
Are the stakes high
enough?
-
Is there enough of a
“worry factor” for readers?
Write yourself a short
essay about your book, as if you were a critic. How would you,
objectively, rate your story?
Do not be too hard on
yourself.
Don’t expect this first
draft to be perfection, or anything close to it. All first drafts are
lousy, many professional writers believe. That’s part of the point. You
need to get it off
And don’t be too soft on
yourself. You are not the exception to the rule that all first drafts are,
at least, not ready to go.
At this point, you can go
through your manuscript as you wish, looking for those spots that need
work, marking up the pages.
The Major
Stage
Now you're ready for the
all important "dig in" phase, the major re-write. Here, you will benefit
from a "systematic" approach to the task of revision. A
checklist.
In Revision & Self-Editing I have
provided what I call "The Ultimate Revision Checklist." I put this
together after years of compiling the main questions I ask myself on every
book.
That's really what
re-writing is.
First, ask yourself
questions.
Second, answer them in
the best way possible.
The Ultimate Revision
Checklist provides those key questions. You provide the
genius.
***
James Scott Bell is
the best-selling author of suspense novels, and two books from the Writers Digest series "Write Great Fiction." The
first of these, Plot & Structure,
has become one of the most popular WD titles of
recent years. The second, just released, is Revision & Self-Editing.
This
article is adapted from that book.
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